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Review:navyfail says:
I was looking for a story to read when I came across yours. Reading the summary I was like hmm...a quidditch story..definitely want to read that.

First off, I think you have a lovely beginning. I already know a couple of characters and have a good feel of how Roxanne and Jason are like. The quidditch rivalry has been introduced and it feels like the plot is starting or has already started.

Roxanne seems like a sensible character. And Violet seems nice. And they do both like their quidditch men..well, looking at them from afar.

Jason seems very interesting..very interesting indeed. I kind of want to know his motives already but then that may give away the whole story. I really like his flirty, carefree nature. Though he is kind of arrogant. :P Best part is that both of the main characters are beaters. I always found that beaters have the most fun role in Quidditch and the most amusing personalities.

One thing I came across: "I have higher standards then you." I think the 'then' is supposed to be 'than.' Then is used for time and than is used for comparison which that sentence is using.

All in all, fantastic chapter. Now for the second chapter.


Author's Response: :D YAY! I'm so happy that you came across my story, I really hope that you continue to enjoy it.

Thank you, I was worried that I wasn't giving enough information away to keep people interested

Oh yes, they do like to watch the Quidditch men, even if it is from afar :D

Haha, oh Jason! I love him so much! He really has taken a shining to Roxanne. Oh yes he is very arrogant, but I'm glad that you like his flirty carefree nature. I always imaging Beaters to have a lot more fun than the others. :D

Whoops! Thanks for pointing that out, I shall go back and edit that. :S

Thank you so much for your wonderful review and for reading. :D

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