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Review:DracoFerret11 says:
Hello there! This is DarkRose from the forums here to review for you for the HC! :D So, let's go over things:

Plot: So I opened this up because it sounded feminist-y. :) I like that you showed the role that women had in the war and that Andromeda didn't really know where she was supposed to fit, but where she did fit was "good enough" for her. In a lot of ways, that was sad to me. I liked that you showed her life so fully, but so succinctly. I think she's one of the many tragedies left over from the war. She's really great, though. You wrote her well. I like that without purpose, she doesn't feel complete. I empathize.

Characterization: I really think you showed Andromeda well. Her life is a lot more difficult than people consider. It was so sad that she always felt on the "outside" of everything. She lost her birth family, then the family she made for herself. That's tragic. :( But I think you showed how she dealt with that really well. Great job.

Descriptions: I think I would have liked more details about how things looked, sounded, smelled, felt, etc. I liked the emotions you showed, but I could have done with MORE, just to bring the story to life a bit. I think that there's a lot to this story and a lot of places where you could describe her situation to show it in more depth.

Style: I really liked how somber this was. You showed a sad situation in a beautiful light. It wasn't going to be happy and I didn't smile, but it was well-written and well-received. Great job!

--Emily

Author's Response: It's interesting that you have a form for reviews. I suppose it helps keep you organized, huh? :) It also makes it easier for me to organize my reply.

I'm happy that you were able to identify with Andromeda; I also know that feeling of not knowing what to do with myself if I'm not busy with one thing or another. It's weird because I was inspired originally to write this from a very feminist angle, and yet Andromeda doesn't turn out to be very stereotypically feminist at all. I do think she harnesses her own power in a different way.

Andromeda does have a very tragic story and I really latched on to the theme of transience and never quite feeling like she was at home or totally settled. I'm sure she felt that way literally in terms of safety, but I guess this piece is more about how it feels emotionally.

I sometimes feel like a story is really based in imagery, and I guess I didn't get that feeling from this one. It was really meant to be more about her characterization. Still, though, I can appreciate what you're saying. I'll keep your comments in mind for my in-progress one-shot. I am happy to hear that the style was to your liking; it was meant to be sad.

Thanks for your kind review!

-Amanda


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