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Review:soufflegirl99 says:
This story title sounded really interesting, and the description was definitely quirky and sounded funny. I'm really glad I did read this, because it had me fascinated after the first word, and I do love a bit of humour and an Al/OC!

The structure is fantastic - those bold remarks that stand out - and the readable paragraphs that kind of suck you in. The format is awesome! Especially the last bit, those one word sentences that really make you realize the full depth of her fear and terror. I think it was really humourous the way you broke apart the sentence then joined it together again - that was really inventive and cool.

The whole first paragraph about being a cat was very funny, it helped settle in the character, and gave us a nice clear snapshot of her witty personality. The style in which you write her in is memorable, and very addictive and gripping to read, as well as easy. Her thoughts don;t make you work too hard, which is awesome. The last line, however, was truly suspenseful, and I can't wait to read what happens next!

The pace was brilliant, and the way you kept playing the reader along, not letting us realize it was Albus till the very end was amazingly done. The steady pace suddenly gave way to these shocking and tense sentences that really sent the realisation bells ringing. I thought that was very original, and very cleverly done!

Overall, a creative and quirky first prologue with a great realistic character and a lovely sense of humour. Awesome!

Sophie :D

Author's Response: This was more of an experiment on my part than anything else. The story has been in my head for years and I decided one day, on a whim, to just write it. Not think about it and just write it. So I'm glad that you liked this! It's such a relief and I feel like I'm reassured that, yes, I am doing the right thing.

Thanks so much for saying you liked my main character's voice in this! For someone who really loves my own bed, she was surprisingly hard to figure out! So it's nice that you came in here and told me that you liked her.

I do hope to get around to writing more of this - and I do want to! I just need to find the time. And your review has really motivated me.

Thanks so much!

Jasmine.


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