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Review:starryskies55 says:
Oh Sirius you poor baby :(

This was so sad, Alli! Sirius must have been in so much pain after Lily and James were killed, it doesn't bear thinking about, but you've done such a wonderful job of portraying this, it's truly astounding.
Starting from the beginning- I was a little bit confused at first, but I thought it was a prisoner of Azkaban nearly straight away after you described the cliffs, and it sounded like a deliberate allusion to Azkaban. The fact that Sirius dreamt that, or hallucinated, it was painful for him to wake up and me to realise it wasn't real.
Again, you have some FANTASTIC turns of phrases- I loved especially how you described the prison walls as painted, like they weren't real. It was awesome.
And the flashback to the night at Godric's Hollow- that was some amazing description. It was very evocative, especially when you described the house as lifeless, and Sirius repeating that he just couldn't lose Harry as well- it was so so sad.

Amazing one shot Alli, well done!

Author's Response: Jenny,

I'm sorry I made you sad! What can I say - I'm a sucker for an angsty story. I can understand how the beginning of the story is confusing. It was really difficult to figure out how to transition from the dream state to reality without making it sound choppy. I'll have to go back and see if there's a way to make it a bit more clear. The flashback to Godric's Hollow was probably the most difficult part of the story for me to write since it's such an important moment and forced me to write dialogue which I always find to be challenging. I'm happy you enjoyed that part and that it didn't distract from the rest of the story.

Thanks for taking the time to review!

Alli


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