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Review:starryskies55 says:
WO ALLI. Okay, so this was so powerful and moving, it chilled me. I can't ship Snily, but this piece really made me appreciate the love that Snape had for Lily. It must have really been astonishing for it to sustain him throughout all those years, and you did such an amazing job showing it.
Even in such a short piece, you saw Snape develop and grow but his love remained the same and that was beautiful. I loved the line where he told Lily that she was 'blossoming' today, that was a fantastic pun! :P You've got some great phrases in here, and your description is fabulous, I really enjoyed the first part in particular, for example- 'murderous heartbeat'- the oxymoron there is just to die for.
Your descriptions of the relationship between Lily and Snape seemed very easy and realistic- their dialogue was very natural and the piece overall flowed really well, even with all the different flashbacks.

Overall, I really enjoyed this piece. I'm so glad that Snape got some happy thoughts and memories before he died. Well done, Alli!

Author's Response: Jenny!

I'm sorry it took me so long to respond to your review! Thank you for taking the time to review this story and provide your amazing feedback. I wouldn't call myself a Snily shipper either, but I'm glad you enjoyed the story despite the Snily feel to it. I think there was certainly potential for a relationship there if things had turned out differently. I'm glad you thought Snape's love for Lily was convincing. I find it interesting how Snape's love is stagnant while his personality and goals change so drastically as he ages and matures. I'm glad you pointed out this fact in the story since that was a part of their relationship I was trying to show. I probably focused the most of my time writing on the descriptions, so thanks for pointing those out! I hope they helped bring the story to life.

Thanks again for your lovely review.

Alli


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