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Review:AlexFan says:
I never got to finish Welcome to Blunderland (obviously that's a huge mistake considering some pretty awesome stuff seemed to have happened).

Scorpius sounds so empty, seeing things through his point of view, he seems almost emotionless. Everything he sees and everything he does is made to sound almost boring. He doesn't have any reaction to the things happening to him.

For someone who's writing in firt person present point of view for the first time, you're very good at not switching between past and present. It's very difficult to do and I know lots of people who have trouble with it or slip up (guilty).

I don't think anyone or anything can keep Flora from being happy and cheerful. Even though it sounds like a curse practically deformed her face, she's so cheerful.

Anyway, this was a really interesting first chapter and now inked to go finish reading Welcome to Blunderland so I can be caught up on everything that's happened.

Author's Response: Hi! Thank you for coming to review :3

Ooh, thanks for saying so! I must admit that I really did struggle at first getting my tenses right, so it's a relief to hear that. I'm glad it's worked! And that's a really interesting view of Scorpius' voice - I'm going to try and develop that more throughout the story now you've pointed it out.

Thank you so much for your comments! :) ♥

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