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Review:Calypso says:
Hey there! Here from the House Cup!

So I've Tonks and Remus' relationship interpreted in all sorts of different ways, but it was nice to read something that explored both the good and bad parts of it, so to speak. In just a few words, you managed to really portray a couple struggling in the face of war, and the terrible choices that that can entail.

I just loved how you began and ended with the same words, and with Tonks passing Remus' words onto Teddy at the end (although it's painful to think that those are the last words she ever says to her son :( ) It gave the story a kind of circular feeling that I liked a lot.

I really like that you explored Tonk's feelings about Remus runnning away to Harry and co- this really made me realise how good of her it was to take him back after that. You make Remus seem very human in this, with flaws that he struggles against just like everyone else, which is good.

Another thing I like is how you put this in the present tense- it makes it all a lot more dramatic and immediate, which works perfectly here.

I've got two little nitpicks for you (and they really are tiny things!) One is that I think Wolfsbane is spelt like this? And another is that when Remus talks about coming back to Dora and his son, surely he doesn't know if the baby will be a boy yet?

Oh but the part where Tonks handed the baby to her mother was just heartbreaking! I loved the way she described his smell, and the fact that it was her love for him that drove her to leave him- I quite enjoyed the irony of all that! I feel so bad for all the characters in this, all having such difficult things to endure, but I suppose that's exactly what war causes...

A great, very thought-provoking piece of writing. Great work!

-Bethany

Author's Response: Hello!

I think one of my major goals while writing is to write something that is realistic and that people can relate to. In order for that to happen, the good and bad parts of a relationship have to be shown. And of course, that's even more essential when you throw something as big as a war where people die into the mix.

And the circular bit to this story was the most heartbreaking part of this story, at least for me writing it. Combined with the present tense, you really felt Tonks' struggle of having to decide between the man she loved and the little boy who depended on her for everything. It was really hard and painful to watch...

As for those two little things...I'll definitely go through and fix those things. Because this was stream of consciouness, I didn't go thorugh and do any in depth editing, so thank you for pointing them out!

Thank you so much for the review! It's much appreciated!
~Grimmerz


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