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Review:Roots in Water says:
Hello there!

I really liked how you've added an extra layer to this story. The plot line I can see developping with Chase Davies promises to be quite interesting... (And is Davies related to Roger Davies?) :P

I really, really liked how you brought the story into the classroom in this chapter. The little mention you'd given earlier in this story made it so that her talent for Transfiguration wasn't completely out of the blue (though a few more references to her academics would also be nice). I liked how you had her tutor Ryan with that one spell- it made McGonagall's offer more reasonable. I would have liked to see more details about how exactly she helped him, though - just watching her wouldn't be completely helpful if he couldn't get if before from watching McGongall. Perhaps she could direct him verbally through the actions?

Chase Davies, Chase Davies... The little scene at the end of the chapter was very interesting. So he's flirting with her... And he's known as a flirt himself. I can only imagine that he doesn't have the best of intentions, but unfortunately Ella will be stuck with him for the forseeable future. He's probably going to try and sabotage the Gryffindor Quidditch team through her... *eyes Chase suspiciously*

I liked the more active role Dominique had in this chapter. It made their friendship seem more real and more equitable, instead of Dom just supporting Ella in everything Quidditch.

All in all, I think that you did a good job with this chapter. I certainly enjoyed reading it! (And now I'm really curious to read on). Good work! :D

Author's Response: layers like a layer cake! Yum!
(i forgot to mention before.) Mr. Wood is Oliver. I figured he would've retired from Quidditch by now. And Chase is Roger's son.
Dom is definitely going to be playing a bigger role in the future, never fear. Ella's boy drama brings out the best in her.
(hands up) ahhh you got me! yesh was it that predictable?
Thanks for the suggestions!
virtual hugs and butterfly kisses,
Your Jilly
(i really hope you've seen AVPM, or that reference just sounds really creepy...)


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