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Review:Roots in Water says:
Hello there!

This was certainly a nice chapter- it was good to see them interacting outside of Quidditch. :) And their meal certainly sounds delicious: marshmellows and chocolate and all sorts of yummy candy!

As I said before, it was great to see them interacting outside of Quidditch. Reading about them having fun together, laughing and chatting and having a good time, made the bond between them come alive a lot more, made it seem more real. However, I think that you could make it even more present by having Ella describe her thoughts about them more often. Your chapters are often filled with action (very appropriately), but not quite as much with emotion. I know Dominique's more of the emotion gal, but it would be great to see Ella's more personal thoughts about the guys.

The Gryffindor Quidditch team certainly seems to have its wildly fun moments. I can't believe the things that they're allowed to get away with- a bonfire on school grounds, near the forest? What would happen if it got out of control? You'd think that the teachers would have more of a tight watch on the kids... But maybe they're just indulgent of a winning team. :P

And Al's tactics do seem to be working. I'm sure that, although they may have some tough games, no one will be able to beat them (even if they spy on them like they did to the Hufflepuffs).

All in all, I think that you did a good job with this chapter. The fun everyone seems to be having was great to read and as a "filler" chapter I think it was necessary. You had the right idea about the team bonding! Great work! :D

Author's Response: Oh i love team bonding so so much and I'm glad you do too!
lack of emotions? never fear, Ella will quickly turn into an emotional lump come chapter... 10? Yeesh there's a lot of emotional drama in this gal's future.
Go Gryffindor!
-Jilly


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