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Review:Roots in Water says:
Hello there!

Another interesting chapter. Ella was so close to actually doing schoolwork... But then she was dragged away to Quidditch related things by Finn. Oh my gosh. How on earth will she pass Fifth Year? I picture an academic intervention in her future... (But seriously- doesn't she do things other than Quidditch? :P )

I was actually quite shocked when they went to spy on the Hufflepuff team. I mean, I can definitely understand the competitive spirit and the need to win, but I'd have thought that the Gryffindors would avoid doing something that could be seen as a "Slytherin" move. Spying on a rival team is awfully sneaky and close to cheating. Their notes didn't even look that detailed (but maybe you didn't include the juciest and most informative parts of them).

I think that you're doing a good job of building the friendship/relationship between Ella and Finn. They're spending more time together, so it's natural that they're becoming closer, and they're certainly comfortable with teasing each other. They both have a more childish and fun-loving personality, which makes it easy for them to have fun together.

Of course, the more time we read and thus are able to observe them, the deeper and more dimensional their personalities and characters will become. But right now they're just nice, humourous and fluffy characters. :)

All in all, I enjoyed this chapter. It was great to see Ella interacting more with the team, especially outside of an actual Quidditch practice. It definitely shows the bond that can grow between a team. Great work! :D

Author's Response: yay Finn and Ella!
Of course they do their schoolwork, but it's no fun to write about "The Adventures of Agent 007 and Bond Girl in Study Hall!" A secret mission to spy on the Hufflepuffs is much more amusing.
Yeah, sure, it's a slytherin move, but it was a good chance to show their relationship, and to size up the competition.
(Now that you're talking about my characters becoming deep and dimensional I'm freaking out that they aren't deep or dimensional at all. Oh dear.)
Thanks again for provoking my thoughts!
-Jilly


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