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Review:nott theodore says:
Hello my dear!

You're really making it so hard for me to form a solid opinion on these characters - I feel like they change constantly from chapter to chapter, depending on what they do and the way they treat Tor and others. Tor's the only one I have a concrete like of, even if she does do silly things sometimes (oh, and Terry. I can't forget Terry!)

It's so interesting to see your portrayal of Yaxley in this story. He does seem to be quite one-dimensional in the books, but here we can see him as a loving and devoted father, someone I truly believe would do anything to save his daughters - although I'm unsure whether he'd remain as protective of them if they did something to betray his beliefs. But since he is a good father, I can see Tor's dilemma even more; she's starting to question what she's always been told, but with the reintroduction of her father, how can something she's been told by someone so wonderful be wrong?

I liked Tor's brief flash of jealousy when she saw Terry sitting with the 'Leanne girl'. It's very realistic! I also liked her thinking, for a moment, what her life would be like if she could actually introduce Terry to her father. I feel so sorry for anyone in this sort of situation - in fact, anyone who had to grow up through this war!

Daphne's one of those characters I'm unsure about as well - she seems quite sweet at times, but she takes the sibling rivalry far too seriously at times. Then again, I think you portray their relationship very well.

The end section was brilliant! I'm always in awe of Tor's abilities, and using the mouse to listen in on the conversation was a great idea. You handled the changes in time very skilfully, but what strikes me most is what she heard. The Death Eaters are going to attack the Burrow? I know that the plan has to fail, but I'm still interested to see what Tor will do with the knowledge, now that she and Ginny have formed a strange sort of friendship. I hope she tells her, because it's the right thing to do, but that could also put her at risk of exposure amongst the Death Eater ranks...

Great chapter!

Sian :)

Author's Response: Look at you, just spoiling me with reviews! I hope you know how much I appreciate getting your feedback on each chapter, and such thoughtful and kind words as well! :)

I'm glad you find the characters diverse and always changing, I enjoy writing them- both the good and the bad. I actually really like Tor personally, even though, as you said, she makes a lot of mistakes she's such a great character to write. And yes, Terry is of course also great!

I'm glad you find Yaxley interesting as I really enjoy coming up with his character and the dyanamics in his relationship with Tor. I know, he is very dedicated to his family yet also to the DEs, and when those interests start to oppose each other he will certainly be in a conundrum. You have Tor's confusion exactly right, she adores her father but also has these changing opinions, and it is both challenging and interesting to imagine her in this situation

Haha, I'm glad you appreciated Tor's jealousy, I thought it was a very typical moment for a teenage girl. I feel sorry for everyone too, especially since there's no end in sight really at this point.

It's great to hear you're enjoying Daphne even if she is quite a brat at times, though to be fair she probably thinks the same thing about Tor.

I'm very pleased as well that you liked the ending section, especially since it was a spontaneous addition to the chapter which just sort of came to me. I'm glad you liked the revelations and the changes in time as well, and yes it does put Tor in a very uncomfortable position.

Thank you for another thoughtful and wonderful review hun! :) It was a pleasure to receive, and again I'm so sorry for taking long in responding to your amazing reviews!

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