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Review:Calypso says:
Hello! Here for the House Cup :)

This was so tense! You conveyed Lily's panic and terror wonderfully, so that I could really empathise with her. It was written so vividly... I love how you plunged the reader straight into the action there at the beginning- I guess because you don't have many words to spare- and make the reader work out the situation that Lily's in as they read on.

I loved how you described how the green light "peeked" under the door. It seemed like a rather childlike word that fitted perfectly with the childishness of Harry. There was a great contrast between the violence of the spells, and the innocuous-ness of that word... And actually also the contrast between her attempts to comfort Harry and the terror in her mind.

The imagery was really striking in this too- the bit where Lily was describing the pain like red hot knives, was especially great, I thought.

There was something a bit disjointed and fleeting about the way you wrote this, which perfectly seemed to capture Lily's fractured state of mind- it made it seem even more realistic.

And the ending was great (if a bit depressing!) It felt so final, and really brought home what an awful end it was for a woman who had such a full life.

A really dramatic and exciting one-shot! Great job!

-Bethany

Author's Response: Im glad that the disjointed sort of thinking fit well with how it would have been to be Lily. There must have been a million things running through her head, so I wanted to do her justice. I'm glad that you enjoyed this! Thank you for reading and for giving such a lovely review!(:

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