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Review:Roots in Water says:
Hello there!

Oooh- what an interesting start! Though it's not my favourite genre, I always do like a good sports story (especially those about the underdog) and this is promising to fit into that category quite nicely!

Your summary caught my eye- only girl on a Quidditch team? I can already see some of the challenges and prejudices she will face. After all, there were some slights directed towards her today based on her gender. I hope that she proves to everyone just how good of a Seeker she really is!

I think that you did a good job of writing the Quidditch scene in this chapter. Writing action scenes can be difficult (I know I have problems with it), especially since you really have to make it seem like everything is happening quickly while still giving enough detail. I think that you did a good job because, while the action seemed to happen quickly, I could still visualize Ella on her broom, zooming around the Quiddich field.

I was a little surprised, though, that the tryouts for Seeker were so short. I would have thought that Albus would release the Snitch numerous times and see who had the best capture rate - just in case the first catch was a fluke/a very lucky one. I'm curious to learn your reasoning behind the Seeker tryouts. :)

All in all, I was very intrigued by your first chapter and I'm heading right off to the second one now. Ella has an interesting, spitfire personality and I'd like to see how she acts in class as well. :P Good work! :D

Author's Response: OH MY GOD I FRICKIN LOVE YOU MAN!
this chain of huge review in my account--- it's shocking that i'm not dancing with joy. THANK YOU!
yeah i guess the whole seeker tryouts was kinda... ehh. (my vocabulary is stunning, i know.) But it was the first chapter i wrote, and it could use some editing for sure. thanks for pointing that out!
THANKS AGAIN FOR THE REVIEWS. LOVE YOU.
-Jils


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