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Review:charlottetrips says:
Wow, I continue to be impressed at the depth that you've taken with this story and the premise on which it is based. This is like reading an Original Fiction because there are no known HP characters to fall back on. While there's magic evident here, it's also woven in such a way as to seem like we DID use magic during WWII.

You handle the varied characters here well. I was impressed at how you switched between POVs but in a way that wasn't confusing to me as a reader. You left off at natural points and even threw in a flashback that didn't feel random!

The past baggage of Camille and Xavier is intriguing. I think relationships based off of friendship are the best and they last the longest as there's always this underlying affinity there (no matter who says what on the matter *cough*Camille*cough*).

Jean and his uncle seem to have a pretty messed up relationship. I mean, the way he plans on assassinating him! That's pretty grim.

Since we keep cutting back to Simon, you make me wonder how he's going to break out and join the rest of the team!

Why must you make me want to continue reading?

Author's Response: Ohh yay I'm glad you get the feeling of magic actually being used during WW2! Trying to interweave facts and fiction is one of the super interesting aspects of writing this story.

Phew, thank you for thinking the varied characters were handled well! Ensemble casts are difficult to handle sometimes, what with having to think about where everyone is and what they're doing and how can they be included despite not being the focal point, etc. It's nice to hear it works!

Camille, my poor delusional baby - don't listen to her haha

Okay so the relationship between Jean and his uncle is something I've been attempting to flesh out as I edit these first eight chapters but it's going to stay, as you accurately pointed out, pretty grim and messed up. More to come!

Well, you probably know about Simon by now if you've stuck with the story. I hope you liked it!

Thank you for the review!


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