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Review:luvinpadfoot says:
Aw I hope Emily's okay. She does seem like she's been hurting a lot over everything that's been happening with them. Maybe the honeymoon will help her a bit, and Scorpius too of course.

I have two small critiques for the story in general and I think I've mentioned both before, one is that sometimes things seem to pass by really quickly, especially like in this scene with the drugs and Emily being too thin. I think it could be so much better if you slowed it down and spent some time describing certain bits.

The other critique is just that a lot of the time Scorpius and Emily seem to be the only two characters. Like they'll mention other people and sometimes Lucius or someone else will pop up, but oftentimes it's just the two of them and I think a few more characters could help.

But I'm really enjoying this story! Sorry I haven't reviewed in a bit and then all of a sudden review spam, was distracted and forget to check to see when it's updated. But I do love it! It's one of my favorite stories and I'm looking forward to seeing what else happens to Scorpius and Emily!

Author's Response: Oh wow that really was review spam! Haha I'm glad though :)
I don't like the time flow either, but at the minute I'm lacking inspiration for events in between the main plot points. I'll probably add some in later.
The drugs thing comes to a head in the next few chapters, I'm just trying to re write the next one because it got rejected, and I'm having trouble with it. There is definitely a happy ending though, I promise :)
Also to the point of other characters, they rejoin their friends in the next few chapters, because they have been on their own and that definitely hasn't been helping Emily at all, she's one of those people that likes company. But I might add some more company filler chapters to thicken it out a bit later on, just so it doesn't seem to jumpy.
I'm really very glad that you like it, it's my first fanfic and it's far from perfect, but I like getting suggestions to make it better :)

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