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Review:CambAngst says:
Hi, Ral! I was hoping I'd get a chance to read this and now I can help out a little with the House Cup, besides. So I'm breaking my self-imposed ban on doing anything other than writing Detox tonight. ;)

Very clever idea! So many people write the Rose-Scorpius pairing, but so few find a truly clever way to integrate them into the larger Weasley family. Either that, or they just assume the problem away by making Scorpius completely misunderstood. I liked the fact that you tackled the relationships head-on, and gave it a great humorous quality, besides. Scorpius and Ron seemed like two peas in a pod, in spite of the obvious differences in their upbringing. It was funny to see that Rose really did wind up marrying her father, after a fashion. I guess there's more to that saying than just words.

You picked a nice assortment of muggle objects and customs that Ron and Scorpius were completely unprepared to deal with, and avoided some of the worst cliches of the "wizard out of water" genre in the process. I don't think I've read an airport scene quite this funny since the one in Delicate where Arthur manages to get the entire family ejected from Heathrow.

Hermione's letter to Harry and Ginny brought the story to a good resolution. It was a lot of time and material to cover and I think it would have been difficult in any other format. Plus, the idea of her leaving Ron in Harry's care and taking Ginny instead cracked me up.

A few typos, in case you'd looking to tidy up:

... all because she had hit the breaks a little too sudden when a stray dog had crossed their path. - hit the brakes

"And you should thank your lucky stars they did, or else we would all be supporting Dark Marks on our foreheads... - sporting Dark Marks

When we got there, Ron took one look at the monks, dressed in their long, black cloaks, yelled "Death Eaters!" and took off with Scorpius in toe. - in tow

Otherwise, terrific writing. The story flowed really well and was a nice, easy read. Good job!

Author's Response: Hey Dan!

Thank you so much for yet another humbling and amazing review!
When I saw the prompt for the HC I really wanted to do something like that, since I traveled a lot with my parents when I was younger and I've seen all these places, all with a Harry Potter book in hand. :)

I was trying to remember who wrote that funny airport scene for a while so thanks for that! I'm really happy you liked it and thank you for the lovely review!


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