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Review:magnolia_magic says:
I am so glad this oneshot caught my eye! Normally I shy away from Voldemort fics (I'm not a sad-ending kind of person), but every now and then I'll stumble upon one that I love. This is definitely one of them! Your style is just beautiful, and I was engrossed in Natalie's story.

I'm glad you filled us in on her childhood, and what she and her mother went through. It makes her transformation much more believable. And her mother's death was even more heartbreaking because she was all Natalie had to come home to. And her relationship with Tom was so convoluted that I couldn't see any hope for a happy ending. It just broke my heart that Natalie was so starved for love that she would turn to the one person who could never give it to her.

Much of this story consists of Natalie recounting past events; we don't really get into the present until the very end. The one suggestion I have is to make some of this happen in the present, if that makes sense. Have Natalie tell about some of the events as they happen; it would help the story feel more immediate. But that's just a nit-picky thing...it didn't detract at all from my enjoyment of this!

I love that you brought the whole story full-circle with the last paragraph. It brings this deeply sad story to a very poetic, haunting end.

Awesome job!

--Maggie

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