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Review:caomoyl says:
Despite being short, this was such a powerful one shot! I love the way you used the italicised sentences; it really made them stand out. It felt like those parts were the statements and the rest were the thoughts and feelings, but those started to mix together towards the end.

Lily's longing to be with Harry but also wanting him to live was heartbreaking. How she watched him grow up without her and James and wishing so much that she could have been a part of it.

The lines 'I died because I couldn't move. I couldn't live in a world without him.' really tugged at my heart because she died not wanting him to die but then had to watch him live without her which couldn't have been any easier for her. I just want to reach in and give her a huge hug.

Great job with tearing me apart with this!

Author's Response: I did feel as though it concluded itself very quickly- but I didn't want to shove in fillers, y'know? Making it longer doesn't necessarily make it better. Oh, yeah, the conversation she'd have is italicized, but what she means is normal. You've hit it on the head :)
I think any parent that really loves their child would feel that way- at the end of the day, she has a responsibility to Harry to look after him and some ways, I think she'd think she failed him.
Thank you so much for the lovely review, you're very kind :)


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