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Review:Elphaba and Boyfriends says:
Hi, Elphaba here! I apologize for my tardiness.

This is a great chapter! I remember thinking that Liz and her mother must have some sort of family secret, but I wasn't expecting her mother to reveal that she's a witch!

This was actually my first clue that Amelia was about to reveal her magic, "She leaned against the door frame and crossed her arms, shaking her head slightly at her mother's refusal to use the dishwasher." The whole "technology and magic don't mix" conflict popped into my head, then. I think the dialog between Liz and her mother is very well-done, and her mother's story also makes perfect sense.

I think Amelia's anger at Charlie is really interesting, and I'm curious to see how they'll interact with each other in the future. I think that Liz's reactions to her mother's revelations are understandable, as well: "I'm not sure who I'm angrier with - Charlie, for lying to me for two years, or you, for lying to me my whole life!" I can certainly see why she'd be angry.

The fact that Liz is also a witch was another unexpected shocker, mainly because she's never appeared to have issues with technology. Although, now that I think more about it, maybe the combination of her and Charlie in the same room is what caused some of the accidents with electronic appliances? Going forward, it will be interesting to see how she begins to adjust to and possibly harness her powers. I would expect her to look back over her life and realize that their were subtle signs all along that she ignored or explained away.

Mulciber, wow, that was a surprise, too! Thanks for another engrossing chapter; I'm looking forward to the next one. :)

Author's Response: Hey there Elphaba!

You have absolutely nothing to apologize for - it has taken me nearly a month to respond to your amazing review, and I'm very, very sorry! :(

I'm glad you think this is a great chapter! I remember in one of your earlier reviews you said that you thought there might be some secret; I'm glad it still surprised you.

Haha! I intended that line to be a slight hint, but I didn't want to give it away. At one point, I thought about taking it out, but I'm glad I decided to keep it!

I was trying to get started on the next chapter today, and as I re-read this one, Amelia's anger with Charlie really surprised me as well. But we'll see how they interact soon enough! :)

I'm glad you thought Liz's reactions were believeable! I was really concerned about that! I wanted her to be angry, but not angry to the point of being ridiculous and making herself into a un-likeable character, so I'm glad to hear it wasn't overdone!

Liz's issues (or lack thereof) with technology will be addressed soon enough! *Winks* And that last part of the second to last paragraph... you have no idea how right you are! :P

I'm glad you thought this was an engrossing chapter! I hope I didn't surprise you too much all at once!

Thank you SO MUCH for this amazing review! ♥ I will certainly be re-requesting (if I ever finish the next chapter, that is...) :P

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