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Review:patronus_charm says:
Woo I finally made it here!

I thought the scene with Verity and Mrs Clearwater was really lovely. Even though the conversation between the pair of them was limited I felt as if there were a lot of things left unsaid and left like that for the better. You really captured there silent understanding and it was a really lovely moment. When they were talking about the other one killed it was really heart-breaking, because I could tell that they were going to be a lot more to come and they could to. The feelings you captured really were wonderful.

The description in the scene with Gemma was really great. I could really feel the atmosphere of the Hunted Unicorn and sense everything in there and I rarely get that in stories. Another thing which I really liked was how you didnít just stick to setting description but went into detail with Gemma and her personality and that was really great. Iíve really got a sense of her and I canít wait to see more as that conversation intrigued me and I feel as if sheís going to have an impact on the rest of the story.

The way that Penelope continues to play in Verityís mind is really interesting and I canít wait to see how her death shapes the rest of the story and Verityís life. Seeing her in the flashback was really great too because Iím building my own opinion of her now and not just what Verity thinks of her. The way her and Percy got together was really lovely and I liked how you made him seem romantic which I never thought would happen. Learning about Seb and Verity was really interesting too, and it was if they were pushed a little together which may explain the friction between them now.

The mystery seems to think with the story about Bess acting as great prelude to this part of the chapter. I liked the connection Penny had with Bertha and Aaron and it just adds so much mystery and suspense to the story, I canít wait to see what itís about as Iím sure it will be great. Then the mystery ink! I need to know now!

The conversation between Verity + George = &hearts. I really love how youíre slowly building it up to their friendship and then I guess more. I really loved all of their little banter. One thing I did notice was that George seems to be taking himself more seriously than usual so itís making me wonder whether he does feel something more towards Verity than being acquaintances. I especially loved it when they went to the shop because the romance and mystery developed there!

Another excellent chapter and I canít wait to read on!

-Kiana

Author's Response: Hola! I'm sorry for taking so long to respond to your amazing review! I'm glad you liked the interaction with Mrs. Clearwater and found it believable and left things unsaid. I'm pleased to do their grief justice and explore the dynamic!

Ah I'm really pleased you liked Gemma, she was one of the first characters I came up with while planning the story. Since I love English pubs it's great to hear the atmosphere of the Hunted Unicorn came across well. She'll definitely be making more appearances as the story goes on!

I'm glad you find the lingering memories of Penelope interesting and I'm glad you're getting your own impression of her. The flashback was very fun to imagine and I'm planning to have many more to give a strong idea of Verity's memories of Penny. Ah, I'm glad you thought Percy had some romance and a different side to his character.

It's great to know you're enjoying the mysterious aspects and the connections between the different deaths. It's tricky to write, since there are so many plotlines and characters, but I'm really enjoying it! :)

Aw, I'm so glad you like George! They are cute and I really enjoy writing him and how they interact. You're right, George definitely does have a little attraction at least for Ver. :)

Thank you for a wonderful review! :D I hope to have the next chapter written and up sooner than later. Also, thank you so much for the questions on my MTA page, I've been so busy with traveling but loved recieving them and have been slowly working on my response! You're awesome my dear! :D


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