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Review:Violet Gryfindor says:
Oh, this is fantastic! I was surprised to see an all OC story for this challenge - they're hard enough to find at the best of times, and yours is a particularly fine example. Your characters feel as though they just stepped out of canon because you make them fit so well into the wizarding world. Your protagonist is also very realistic - she's not just the wallflower type, not in the way that she constantly reads her reactions and emotions, struggling against them as she goes. She really does go to "find herself" in the outside the world, growing and gaining confidence in ways that she just couldn't at Hogwarts, or even in Britain. It makes for an extraordinary journey both inside and out.

Another aspect of your story that stood out was the use of the Portkey Office. For some reason, portkeys don't come up much in the stories I've been reading, so it was refreshing to read a story that features them so prominently. It was also one of the reasons why your story felt so much like canon because you choose the perfect items - so random and incredibly everyday - and created a whole system of travel that makes me wonder why anyone would use a broomstick for long-distance travel. It was a lot of fun to explore the world through your character - you describe all of the places with wonderfully vivid details. I felt as though I was seeing all of those places too.

And of course there's the love story. When I first saw the grinning boy, I hoped that she would meet with him again, and the relationship that grows between them felt very natural - you effortlessly demonstrate how they belong together, and you didn't need canon to support this at all, it just happened. That's what makes the romance in this story so sweet. This story would make for a lovely romantic movie!

You've done amazing work with this story - it was a joy to read! It's very different from your other story I've read - "Ignorance" - but it has the same high quality of writing and storytelling. ^_^

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