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Review:teh tarik says:
Hello! Wow, this is a very strong start! Your characterisation of Charlotte is very clear and very focused, and there is a good balance of light and darker things in her life. I especially love the description and portrayal of her broken mother. It was really quite haunting. You had some lovely lines in there as well, such as: Her father had told her many months ago that he had once been attracted to the brokenness, but his love for her couldn;t break past the walls. This line just honestly gave me the chills; it's so beautifully worded and it's such a strange and unsettling concept, to be in love with someone's 'brokenness'.

I like the introduction of James Potter at the end. I'm assuming things are going to happen between Charlotte and him :)

I really liked that last paragraph where she goes to her favourite place in the grove and climbs up and just relaxes. There's such a wonderful sense of serenity and peace, though of course, this is most likely the calm before the storm.

This is a great start! I can't wait to see where this story will go :)

-teh

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I have a few chapters finished already, and they should (hopefully) be up soon! I really appreciate the review, it really does mean a lot. I started this story on a total whim and it's very encouraging. Hope you enjoy the rest of the story!

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