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Review:Violet Gryfindor says:
This is a lovely story so far, Sarah! It's fantastic to see someone writing about Poppy's history and of course a period piece like this is always a treat to find. It was the banner that caught my eye when I was scrolling through the recently added list - it's absolutely gorgeous! - but then I saw your name and knew I had to take a look. :D

It doesn't sound as though you've never written in third-person before. The narrative flows nicely and has a strong narrative voice to it, offering snippets of Poppy's thoughts while also allowing readers to see her from a distance. For instance, when you make reference to the werewolf, but then add that Poppy was too occupied with her own thoughts to really pay attention - that was an excellent little moment to include. It's just enough foreshadowing to pique the reader's curiosity, and it also reveals a bit about Poppy's personality, especially her youthful excitement. You also reveal her naivety in this way and it's really effective. One of the challenges of 3rd versus 1st person is that one can fall into doing too much "telling" as opposed to "showing", and you overcome that hurdle in a way that looks effortless.

I'm excited to hear more about Poppy's history and also to see more of magical England in the 1940s. There are a lot going on with the war and the bombings - Poppy will certainly have her hands full at the hospital, with a lot more than paper cuts and stomach aches too! It's wonderful to read something of yours, Sarah, and I hope that you continue writing this story - I'll have my eye out for an update! ^_^

Author's Response: Thank you Susan! I about died of a heart attack seeing a review from you! ^_^ I'm so honored because you are such a wonderful writer. Ah yes, the banner is one I made actually. I don't often make graphics anymore so it was fun to do one. You have got me blushing hysterically, Susan!

Well I'm glad it doesn't sound like I've never written in 3rd person before because I was worried it would sound awful. I haven't written a good story in 3rd person in a very long time so this was a challenge.

I'm thrilled you like the story so far. This is probably one of my better recent ones that I've written. I hope Poppy doesn't become too cliche or annoying later on. and thank you for the tip, I'll keep that in mind when I'm writing.

I love writing about lesser known characters that we don't often hear about. I guess that gives me more creative freedom when I write. The 1940s are my favorite era, and I am very fond of Downton Abbey so that was also a little inspiration. I will definitely keep writing! Thank you for your lovely review, Susan! It's definitely given me the push to crank out another chapter. :)


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