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Review:Pheonix Potioneer says:
This is a good story! Looks like you started it at Albus's fifth year. Not many people start then.

I like your personality of Albus- he seems like a good kid. I also like how made Hugo to be some book-smart kid, that's very funny. Not many people portray him as very smart.

Hmm, your Scorpius is interesting. Quite a few stories have Scorpius and Albus as best friends, so I really like how you made them enemies. Very unique!

You have a few mistakes with past and present in this story. Most of it is past tense, but in the second paragraph, you said "misses" instead of "missed". Also, in the 12th paragraph, you didn't put the first quotation mark around "Albus".

What?! The Lightening Rod costs 800 galleons! That's a ton of money! I'm surprised Draco was even considering it. I like the name of the broomstick though, that sounds like an excellent title.

So, it looks like Albus is best friends with Cedric. The second he was mentioned, I assumed he was named after Cedric Diggory, but I didn't realize he was Krum's kid! I'm actually surprised Krum named his Cedric, I didn't know Krum liked Cedric that much. Krum respected Cedric though, so I supposed he was rattled by Cedric's death. I also suppose Krum felt guilty about cursing Cedric.

It's nice that you mentioned the ages of the cousins for future reference. Everybody has them as different ages.

Good job for your first story!

Author's Response: Thank you! I'll try to fix the corrections

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