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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hi Iím here with your first of five reviews!

You really need to stop writing such brilliant stories, itís really not fair on the rest of us! I feel as if youíve adopted a style and I really love it. Itís poetic in a way and not something I often come across in fan fiction but itís such a delight to read and I really love seeing it here. I think the level of description you tend to go into really adds to it, and almost makes it work.

I never, ever, thought about Narcissa and Tonksí relationship before now but seeing it here was a really wonderful insight into what might have happened and what might have been. I really loved how we saw Tonks in various stages of her life as you never would have guessed Narcissa would have been watching her all the way.

Another thing I loved was how you developed Narcissa and Andromedaís relationship. I imagined them to be closer with one another than with Bellatrix and the analogy with the moon was really clever. Narcissaís hate towards her sister when she ran off with Ted and the almost bitterness which ensued was really fitting and explained the divide between them perfectly.

It was strange to see how she viewed Andromeda and Tonks as the golden ones unlike her and Draco. I never thought about it like that before but, again, it makes perfect sense. I feel as if I keep on saying that but itís only because itís true! The contrasting parenting you also described was also excellent and showed Narcissa in an almost pitiful and sympathetic appearance than how we usually see here.

The only tiny error I noticed was here ĎI did not see your mother that day,, yet felt her presence in the audience, her pride and excitement radiating and warming all it encountered, the same addictive pride when I earned top marks in Transfiguration, or stood up for myself in facing Bellatrix's tauntingí where you had two commas but I wouldnít bother changing it too much.

Overall I thought this was a brilliant one-shot and I canít wait to read more of your stuff!

-Kiana

Author's Response: Hi darling! :)

Wow, this review was so thoughtful and kind (like all of your reviews are, really), so thank you! :D I'm so glad you like my style of writing and it comes across as poetic, that is such a compliment! Hopefully the level of detail continues to be interesting and not drag on too much!

The idea for Narcissa thinking about Tonks came to me very suddenly and it just sort of wrote itself. I'm glad you enjoyed it and thought it was a little believable. Since we don't know much about Narcissa really from the books I thought there would be a big difference in the way Harry perceives her and the way she internally thinks.

I'm glad you liked the sister relationship as well! I agree, Bellatrix is so out of control that I imagine the other two would have been much closer, and Andromeda and Narcissa both exhibit a lot of love and loyalty. I'm glad you liked the imagery of the moon and sun as well! :)

I guess I imagined Narcissa as being both bitter and longing for the freedom of Andy and Tonks, and like she wants that freedom for herself and her son who she still loves but in a painful, protective way. I'm so glad you thought the portrayal of their roles as parents and sisters and how Narcissa comes across!

Thank you the lovely review my dear! :) I love getting your feedback and all your sweet words are very much appreciated!


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