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Review:luvinpadfoot says:
This is a great beginning! I really liked your characterization of Charlotte, she seemed very real. Everything about her just fit in so well, her House, reading, running, and relationship with the Potters. And speaking of relationship with the Potters, wow that encounter really did sound awkward!

My main critique was that it was a bit difficult to read because the text was so blocky and the paragraphs were rather long. Perhaps separating them into shorter sections might be a bit easier on the eyes of your readers.

I can't wait to read more and see what trouble she gets into with James before school starts! I can only imagine how they'll be together. And Charlotte seems like such a nice, down to earth girl.

I'm really looking forward to the rest of the story! This was a lovely beginning. And that dramatic turn has me very intrigued. :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! It's going to keep me very motivated to keep writing. I very much appreciate the critique. The writing style shifts a bit in the first chapter so I hope that will be easier to read. Keep checking back, I'm hoping the first chapter will be up soon and thanks again!

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