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Review:KiwiOliver says:
KiwiOliver here with your super late and super apologetic review! (You can understand, us Snakes need to win the House Cup).

I really love this story, did I mention? I love the way it's not linear but we're still progressing in a straight line.

The part with Ginny is pure gold, the mentioning of the Galleon and how she kept her cool. Her parents would be proud!

I really love this line: "But Astoria had had enough of Death Eaters, enough of death altogether..."
I don't know why, but it's just really inspirational and made it so much easier to get right into the chapter and enjoy it!

I like how Astoria kept true to her spy image and didn't want to be thanked, even though she could probably have been protected by the order, I like how you've build her up to be a strong independent character even after all she's been through!
Characterization 100/10 :) Better than ever!

The chapter flowed really well, you incorporate these flashbacks flawlessly and I really liked this one :)

I hope you get the next chapter up soon because I'm itching for more!

Author's Response: Oh my gosh you are so kind! Thank you!!!

And I totally understand--it's part of why I haven't already updated. I've been deeply entrenched in the competition :D Slytherin for the win!

I'm so HAPPY that you liked the part about Ginny. I had planned it, and it was the way it had to happen, but writing that seen was like the clashing of Titans. So much girl power in one room, I was kind of intimidated.

Yeah, I wanted to include the galleon so people might know how she was contacting the Order/D.A., and to highlight how Astoria really has a knack for noticing the important things. If she'd had longer, I don't doubt she'd have figured out a bit more about how the spelled galleons worked.

I'm, like, wilting--a useless puddle of felicity--that you liked this scene. I was really worried about it, and getting this kind of response is so encouraging. Thank you so much for your review. And I'll try to get Chapter 4 posted ASAP!

P.S. Go Snakes!!!

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