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Review:FredWeasleyIsMyKing says:
Hello!

I really enjoyed this one-shot. It's a completely different take to the theme travel but it was really well written.

I liked the idea of Alicia getting the job as an obliviator and having to do the over sea apparition. It was quite funny to see that there wasn't much difference though - it's just the same guy enforcing more determination and so on!

I thought the story of her first few days was good and also gave us a good chance to see what the oblivators do. I thought you wrote it really well!

If I could offer a little constructive criticism it would be to maybe describe the efffects of apparation a little more. We're told it's not a nice experience - would that have improved once Alicia managed to do it over seas?

Well done on an awesome one-shot though!

Lauren :)

Author's Response: Hey Lauren!

Thank you so much for the lovely review! I'm so glad you enjoyed it and that you thought it was a different take! In the past few years I've really been trying to write things that are more original.

Yep! I couldn't think of what extra you might need for overseas apparition.. so I just decided that it would be about reinforcing the same DDDs, which would also allow me to incorporate the exasperating character of Twycross into the story, hehe!

Thanks for the CC! I considered that a bit, but my attempts of adding more detail to the apparition process weren't that good - I sounded like I was just repeating how apparition is described in JKR's books. I'll try and see if I can do anything about that though! In my mind though, the feeling of apparition wouldn't be that different regarding the amount of distance travelled, but I would imagine that the more you apparate, the more used to it you'd get.

Anyway, thanks so much for reading and for leaving such a nice review! :D
- Charlotte


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