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Review:Lululuna says:
Hello! :)

Wow, this was so powerfully written and uplifting at the same time. I really enjoyed reading your beautifully constructed prose and how you gave the often forgotten and mistreated Cho a voice. I really like how you portrayed her, as a girl trying to get by and how she's both still emotionally damaged from Cedric's death yet strangely detached. The way she described death and cemeteries was very chilling, and I almost feel like she was hoping for a release from the necessity for cold grief.

The use of "you" for Cho's new love interest was very effective in my opinion. I wasn't sure for the story whether the character was a boy or a girl, which was also interesting, and the fact that he was a Muggle yet seemed to understand and relate to Cho's grief just fit so well, and I enjoyed the balance of simplicity and implied depth to their conversation and relationship.

The language and writing style here was so eloquent and flowed really beautifully, it was a real pleasure to read. I liked how Cho came across as being well-spoken and intelligent - she is a Ravenclaw, after all! And how she recognized and addressed her own grief and depression.

I loved this line: "Iíve finally grasped the world with both hands so tightly, knuckles orange-stained, and swallowed it, the sweet juice mingling with saliva." Oh, and this one: "I made a spectrum out of their eyes: grey, brightening to blue and then morphing into green, hazel, brown, dark brown. I remember their lips, the way they brushed against mine like moth wings, then disintegrating and leaving a thin film of dust." The whole piece, really. It was so splendidly and richly written, with character and grace and grief. I loved it! I hope you're very proud of this lovely bit of poetry, and for giving Cho some representation and voice! Amazing job! :D

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