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Review:Lululuna says:
Hi there! :)

Wow, this was such an original story and I absolutely loved it. I feel like you could have chopped off the ending where she goes back and expanded this into a much longer story, although of course it works as a lovely one-shot as well. (But if you do change it around and expand it, I'd read it!) :)

I love how well you situated the story in HP lore, what with the battle of the Ministry. It's funny, whenever Voldy and Harry and the rest go and smash things up I never thought about who would have to deal with the mess and face more practical repercussions. Miriam was so interesting, I really enjoyed how since she's a janitor, she didn't seem to fussed about Voldy's return as the way the event affected her was creating extra work. I liked the hint that she didn't really know what her passion was until she went back in time and helped create the Time Turner. She seems like such a sympathetic person, especially how she felt guilty about inconveniencing others on the ship and her thought processes about what to do. I really enjoyed reading about her! :)

The descriptions of the ship and Miriam's physical travels across the world were very interesting and very well described in my inexperienced opinion. I actually really enjoyed the conversation with Hopkins as well, he reminded me a bit of Arthur Weasley's fanatical interest in Muggles with how he talked about time travel (but maybe that's because I just read a story about Mr. W. haha). I really enjoyed his assumption that Miriam was from the future since she was wearing trousers, I imagine she would be quite scandalous to the poor early Victorian wizards! The question about the Cannons was just a wonderful addition as well, it really made me laugh and linked the story with HP so well.

The only suggestion I have for this masterpiece is that I want MORE!!! It's such a wonderful idea and so well-written and thoughtful, I feel like there's so much you could continue and expand upon in the story. :D

This was such a thoughtful and well-written story to read, and the original take on travel, time-travel and even choice of an OC was great. I really hope you re-visit and write more to this story someday, whether it was about Miriam in the past or in the present I'd love to read it! :) What a lovely job you did with this! :D

Author's Response: aksjdfj;lk Can I just say reading this review was such a high point of my day :)

I'm glad you liked Miriam. I wanted her to be a really average, normal person, not adventurous or anything, and I'm glad that came across. And yes, the most stressful part of Voldemort's return for her was the extra work, haha. But in her defence, the Ministry must have been an absolute mess after a bunch of teenagers and especially Bellatrix's crazy spells had wreaked havoc on it!

I'm really glad you liked the descriptions! Much of that scene was inspired by my own experience sailing on a tall ship, actually. And I think Mr Hopkins was sort of subconsciously inspired by Mr Weasley, haha. He was fun to write :)

Thanks once again for this lovely and thoughtful review! I have the biggest grin on my face after seeing that you called this a masterpiece - I'm so flattered! THANK YOU :D


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