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Review:ohmymerlin says:
Hello there!

This was an interesting piece. I love reading Rebellious!Molly and you pulled her off really well! :D

This is going to sound SO strange but when you described Lucas having orange-y tasting lips, I immediately thought of oranges as well (good descriptions do that! :D) but because I have cuts on my lips (yay for cold weather -.-), they started to sting. :p

Anyway, that was a bit of a tangent so I'll get back on to the ~actual review~. :p

I liked Molly's bitterness and sarcasm. You wrote it really well without dragging it on, which I find that a lot of authors do.

I also liked Lucas as a character, he was cute and interesting. :')

And Molly's -- er... -- profession was an interesting and new thing I've ever read! So yay for originality! :D

This was a rather original one-shot, I must say. You write very well and I found it very believable! Good work! :)

- Kayla. :)

Author's Response: Thanks, your review actually made me laugh. I wanted to make the kissing parts as realistic as possible, without going to much into it, because it wasn't really a big part of the story. So the orange tasting-ness was actually based on my former boyfriend. I'm glad you liked how I wrote her sarcasm and bitterness, it was a bit hard to write, but Molly was abrupt and to the point so I wrote it abrupt and to the point. Molly' profession was rather interesting wasn't it. But don't worry I wasn't planning on making her do that in the long run, I don't think she'd appreciate it either ;) Lucas and Molly were just really desperate for money at that point, so that's why. I'm sorry for your stinging lips *hands over chapstick*. I'm planning on writing a novella for this, just about 6-7 chapters, to go more into depth, and explain details I left out, and better convey Lucas and Molly's relationship, so you should look out for that, if you want to read it.

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