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Review:Roots in Water says:
Hello there! It's been a while since I reviewed one of your stories... Too long, in fact.

To begin, I really liked your "disclaimer". It was funny and it fit in well with the mood of the whole story.

As for the story itself, well, I found it more amusing than unsettling or totally bizarre. It was quite amusing to see Neville drunk and talking crazy talk about his adventures as a wizard. Poor Rick... He had no idea how to handle him!

I really enjoyed how you wrote this story from the point of view of a Muggle. It made the whole story even funnier because he was unable to understand who Neville was and why he was talking about magical things. If it had been written from the point of view of another wizard, or even Neville himself, it would not have had the same effect.

Neville's confusion even in telling his own life story was quite funny as well. I felt just as confused as Rick did when Neville turned on him for "accusing" him of leaving Luna behind. The sentences about Rick not even understanding what Neville was saying because he was using British slang really added to the effect as well.

I'm actually quite curious to know what Neville was really talking about when he talked about Luna wanting to "have it off". I imagine that it was about Luna wanting to discuss all sorts of potentially non-existant magical creatures, but I'm not sure. Rick's confusion confused me!

The characterization of everyone in this story was very well done. Rick was a great narrator and both Neville and Luna were easily recogizable from their personalities in the novels. Neville's ramblings about how he didn't want some of the responsibilities that came with being considered a hero fit in very well with the Neville we know and love from the books and Luna was, well, very Luna. She's a difficult character to write but you definitely managed to capture her spirit here.

And now, to complete my method of no order whatsoever in a review, I will say that I really liked how you introduced the interaction between Rick and Neville. There poor Rick was, trying to help Neville out- he didn't know what he was getting himself into. He made an innocent and completely common remark that, unfortunately, was not so common among Wizarding folk. And it was all downhill from there. :)

All in all, I really, really enjoyed reading this one-shot. You definitely seem to have a knack for writing funny stories- for writing stories of any genre, really. You certainly did a great job with this one! :D

Author's Response: Hi, Roots!

The thing is, this is the first thing I've written since Slytherin Career Day which wasn't meant to be anything other than funny. OK, technically it was meant to earn points for the House Cup, but that's neither here nor there. If somebody got a good laugh out of it, that was all I was after.

What's with the quote marks around "disclaimer"? I don't know what things are like over in Hufflepuff, but in Gryffindor we take the welfare of Nargles and other dubiously extant magical species *very seriously*. ;)

Writing a story from the PoV of an American muggle, especially one of the southern persuasion, is something I've always thought would be really funny. There's enough culture clash there to power a small city. Drunken Neville seemed to me like a fairly straightforward extension of the Neville we see near the end of DH. A Neville who's more or less been pushed past the point of worrying about things like propriety and his own safety. This is a Neville who's seen and overcome so many dark and dangerous things -- Snape, the Carrows, Nagini, Greyback -- that being drunk in a bar in a strange city on another continent doesn't really bother him very much.

Rick was loosely based on several of my redneck uncles. OK, maybe it wasn't actually *that loose*. He rationalizes things and responds to Neville pretty much exactly the way I'd imagine my uncles reacting. He has a certain swagger, an attitude that says, "I'm going to help you and you'd better pay attention because I know what I'm talking about."
In this case, of course, he doesn't really have any idea what he's talking about. So the fun begins...

I wasn't sure what people would make of Luna. Her quirks were obviously exaggerated a fair bit for comedic effect in this, *but*, in a weird sort of way, I could actually see her behaving like this. After all, she's the girl who didn't really have any friends until her fourth year. Then the war is over and she's all on her own with this guy who fancies her and she sort of fancies him. And this is Luna we're talking about. She doesn't have the type of emotional hang-ups that plague us mere mortals. It's all just biology to her. That's the way I rationalized it, anyway. Your mileage may vary.

I'm not sure what else I can say. I'm really glad that you enjoyed the story. Oh, and "have it off" means what Rick initially assumed that it did. It has nothing to do with housekeeping. ;)

Thanks for reading and reviewing!


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