Well, you certainly know how to draw a reader in! With your opening sentence, I can't imagine many people click the back button!
I loved your characterisation of Victoire here - it was one of the strongest and most imaginative takes on her that I've seen in a fic. I enjoyed the way you mentioned her role in the larger Weasley family while still maintaining her character as an individual who's very self-directed. I also really liked your mention of her accompanying Fleur to France. I often see that mentioned in fics about Victoire, and it's unfortunately frequently followed up with a comment about her being fluent in French, sometimes to the point that she has a French accent in English. Your mention of her imitating Fleur's accent until she was "close to passable" made me laugh.
Essentially? She came off as a lovely, vibrant human being.
I also liked the way you characterised the people around her. With her parents, it introduced an interesting dynamic that I hadn't thought about but makes sense now that you've said it. Of course a wanderlust would make Bill and Fleur a little uncomfortable, given their history.
And your portrayal of Teddy was also excellent, especially for that first teenage relationship. Victoire's feelings about are still clearly quite complicated, as they should be, and his possessiveness is normal enough to feel realistic but unfair enough to make me cringe.
The people she met on her travels, who were all true OCs, were also amazingly done. We've all (unfortunately) met Condescending Alexanders before, though unfortunately I've never met a Finn MacCoole. Silent Sam was also a welcome diversion.
You described her travel in enough detail and gave it enough of a local flavor that it felt genuine, but your focus was really on how it was affecting and changing her as a person, which is something that I, as someone who loves travel myself, really appreciated.
This story was absolutely lovely. You did an excellent job depicting the characters and their relationships with each other, and it's a shame that most people seem to be too pressed for time to read the longer ones. I really enjoyed it. Thank you.
House Cup 2013 - Ravenclaw
Author's Response: Hi! Wow, how to start? This review was so incredible to recieve, so thank you for being so thoughtful and kind! :)
I'm very glad you liked the story, and that the first line did it's job by drawing you in. It's great to hear that you enjoyed Victoire and thought she was original, I loved coming up with her character and trying to make her believable and likeable. I definitely know what you mean about her being given a French accent, but I thought this Victoire would be more English than French and definitely not a mini-Fleur. It's so lovely to know that you liked her! :)
I'm also pleased you enjoyed the references to other canon characters. Since we don't know a lot about Victoire from canon I wanted to situate her within the familiar canon characters, and I'm glad you thought it made sense that her parents would be a little uneasy, even if they trusted her and knew she could take care of herself. With Teddy, I wanted to contrast the norm of Vic/Teddy relationships and make it seem realistic: they aren't even twenty yet, after all, and it's wonderful to hear you thought their relationship was believable.
I wish I could meet a Finn MacCoole as well! Although I could do without meeting another Condescening Alexander as well, haha. I'm glad you liked all the OCs! :)
I'm glad this spoke to you as a fellow traveller, and how the story is both about traveling and Vic's growth as a person. I really wanted that love and excitement for traveling to come across, and I'm so very pleased you liked it. If I end up adding more chapters to this story (which I have brainstormed a little, just for fun), hopefully I'll see you back! :) Thank you for just a wonderful review! :D