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Review:ShadowRose says:
Hello there!

I'm completely blown away by this one-shot. You've taken such a simple theme, travel, and morphed it into these ongoing trips through time and space to all of these different major moments in Alice's life, all of which happen within her dreams. It has a very Inception-esque feeling to it.

I love Alice's character - she seems so down-to-earth and real, and she's struggling so much to regain contact with the outside world again, and she has no idea what's happening when she wakes up because she can't remember her dreams that explain everything, but she feels these small connections, and ugh - it's beautiful.

Frank and Alice are adorable; they make all these cute jokes between one another and are just perfect for each other - which makes their fate that much sadder.

I really like the jumping style of this - it's a little confusing at first, but it really adds to Alice's scattered thoughts and inability to comprehend what's going on. I also like how you explained the war by using the people walking on the street as a symbolic sign that the war is going on, therefore they can't be outside anymore, and everything's a little darker.

Augusta's visits are great as well, because we only see her from Neville's point-of-view and he's a little frightened by her, but we see that she's actually really proud of Neville and all that he's done.

I love the scene when Alice is talking to Neville about their trip to France - she seems like a brilliant mother, and then she starts talking about how Neville will be embarrassed by them, and it makes me so sad because they'll never get to that point.

THE ENDING. Oh my gosh you brought tears to my eyes. SHE REMEMBERED HIS NAME. This was so brilliant and sad and hopeful and I loved it so much. Great job with this one-shot!

-ShadowRose (Taylor)

Author's Response: Hello!

Wow, thank you so much! This really means a lot to me!

I've actually never watched Inception. I have the DVD (I know, GASP?! DVDS EXIST?!) but I've never actually watched it. It's on my 'To-do' list (you'd think I'd have a 'To-do' list for school but no) so I will get around to watching it one day, but so far, I have not watched Inception yet. :p

I really wanted it to be jumpy and confusing and scatterbrained just so Alice's mind could be portrayed through this. I'm glad I got it across then! :p

When Alice was talking to Neville about France, it made me feel so sad and emotional and I had to have a break from writing it. I just WANT THEM TO BE BETTER AHHH. D:

haha, I'm glad you liked the ending! I really enjoyed writing those last few lines! :D

Thank you for this absolutely lovely review, and sorry for taking ages to respond!

- Kayla. :)

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