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Review:teh tarik says:
Hello! I've read some of your fabulous writing before and really enjoyed it, so I'm very happy to be reviewing this :)

Gah, I loved this story! It may have been close to 5,000 words, but honestly, it flew by so fast because it was quite superbly paced and the dialogue was lovely and sharp and the scenes were of perfect length. This is such a wonderful fluffy story (well, fluffy in the end :P ) with a madcap adventure and a strange country and I enjoyed this a whole lot. As always, your writing is so fluid and so clear and clever.

Victoire is a complex character; she's very intelligent but she's also incredibly vulnerable, and here in your story, I did really get a sense of how highly-strung she is, to be caught in a foreign land with a dragon's egg about to hatch in her bag, and with some creepy bloke trying to feel her up and her boss getting detained by security. It's all very comical and very light-hearted, but at the same time, Victoire's discomfort is so convincingly portrayed.

Teddy is gorgeously written as well; I love the details of his 'backpacker appearance', all scruffy and tanned and in sandals and with braided wristbands. I love how supportive and sensitive he is toward Victoire; they make such a good pair and they're both so comfortable with each other, never mind that Victoire did mention that she can't stand him. I love his habit of messing up his hair, which he probably learned from Harry. It's a very telling detail, and a very subtle bit of information about Teddy's childhood - how close he was to Harry's family to be able to pick up Harry's own mannerisms and such.

Their plan to infiltrate the Greek Ministry of Magic was absolutely hilarious. Not a very well-thought out plan for sure, but then Victoire was desperate :P One thing that really did make your Victoire stand out from the thousands of other stories about her was her fit of Veela rage. I've read plenty of fics about Victoire having a fiery temper and all, but none where she actually explodes with sparks. Holy smoke, I think I can really visualise her doing that. It's refreshing to see that she's not just a vulnerable helpless damsel-in-distress; she most certainly has that innate Veela ferocity which surfaces when desperate measures are needed.

Anyway, this was a very entertaining and incredibly well-written piece! I've enjoyed it, and I loved the ending where Teddy disguises himself as the creep. Baha! And Victoire beginning to enjoy travelling :) But only with Teddy around to help hold her together, of course. Great work!

-teh

Author's Response: OH my gosh, teh tarik! You give the best reviews!

It was different to write something so fluffy, but it was a nice mental break from all the tension in my other story.

I'm so glad you liked the characters and thought they worked well together! Yeah, Victoire couldn't stand him initially, and I had to cut some of the nuances out of that to make it fit 5,000 words. But mostly it boils down to her insecurities--he's a valiant Gryffindor who wants to help her with things because he cares about her (but hasn't ever explained that, and always jokes it off), and she's a smart girl who likes to do things for herself, because people often don't think she can. So, tension.

That part about Teddy pretending to be the creep was actually my favorite part, though it was originally a bit longer. I figured you couldn't be the son of Tonks and a Marauder without appreciating a good joke, and I wanted to give them a cute moment, so I'm delighted that you found it worth mentioning.

I can't tell you how much I love how you NOTICE things. You're really perceptive, you pay attention to the small details, and your reviews always make my day! Thank you SO much! I can't say it enough :D


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