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Review:Roots in Water says:
Hello there!

Oooh- a story about how Luna and Rolf came to be is always interesting, mostly because their characters are so interesting themselves.

I think that you did a great job with the description in this story. I could quite easily picture Luna skipping along in the rain, a dash of colour on the grey, grey day, just as I could also easily imagine Rolf's appearance. They'd be quite a pair, with their colourful and unusual clothing choices.

I liked how you wrote their interactions. It was quite cute to learn that Rolf had purposefully scheduled his return so that it would coincide with hers and it's fantastic that they both are interested in the same sort of creatures - those that don't exist.

However, even though your characterization was good, I felt that there was a little bit of Luna missing. While you got her physical oddities down pat, there's something about the way she talks that also makes her seem odd to those around her. She has a different way of talking - more abrupt, less cautious of what she's saying - that would be fantastic to see more of here. To me, she seemed slightly too logical and all put together during her first conversation with Rolf... But then again she could have simply changed a lot since the Battle of Hogwarts.

I did really like the flow of this story. Everything went together smoothly and there weren't any hiccups to take a reader out of the story.

As well, I also liked your conclusion. It did a great job of setting up the beginning of the their relationship while also giving the piece a sense of finality.

All in all, I enjoyed reading this one-shot. It was well done and a nice take on the theme of traveling. Great work! :D

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