Hello Amanda! -BookDinosaur- here with your requested review. I'm so sorry for the lateness, I've been travelling. I always seem to get to your requests late! :-/
Anyway, so I love how you characterised Luna. She's not as quirky as in the books, but that makes sense, seeing as how she's all grown up now! I'm so glad you went with the milder approach - there are so many stories which make her come across as plain ridiculous, which she's blatantly not. She's just a little odd. ;) Of course, Luna is a favourite character of mine, so I'm probably a bit biased. :)
I also really like dragons, and to see you blend two favourites of mine in such a skilled way was amazing. I loved your imagery of the dragons and the Breeding Centre, that was just a pleasure to read and I think my favourite part of this one-shot. I could really visualise it in my mind, so well done to you there.
I also really enjoyed seeing Charlie in his work enviroment, obviously where he's most comfortable despite the danger. You managed to get us to understand how passionate and good at his job he was without telling us or making it too blatant.
The Luna/Rolf ship, in my opinion, is one of the hardest to write, as Luna is so difficult and Rolf virtually unknown, but I think you've done a great job of it here and just hinted to us about the eventual romance really well, without telling us 'they're meant to be and one day they'll marry' or something equally heavy-handed. Subtlety seems to be a strong suit of yours, so again, well done there!
This was a really sweet one-shot, and I can really see how it could become a short story. My only CC for you would be to make Luna a little more quirky - we saw hints of it in the 'good voice for singing' comment, that made me snuff a laugh, but all in all she seems a bit too mellowed down. Still, don't take this too seriously, I'm sure I could never have written Luna as well as you have here!
Anyway, this was a really great one-shot, and I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it, Amanda!
Author's Response: Hey, no worries! Thanks for coming by!
I was concerned about trying to get Luna's quirkiness across, and I agree that I could add a little more to that, especially if I continue this. I'm happy that you didn't feel like she was over the line into ridiculousness, though.
It was my first time exploring Luna/Rolf as well as Charlie, and folding them all into an adventure story was interesting and fun. I enjoyed imagining what the dragon reserve would be like and what kinds of things Luna and Rolf would do on their work placement.
Yeah, I like to think I'm subtle :) I'm happy that you felt like all the elements were balanced here and nothing was too blatant.
Thanks for your very kind review, as always!