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Review:FredWeasleyIsMyKing says:
Hi Dan!

Reading this story again - well it's just as good as the first time! I find the whole concept really amusing and it just makes me laugh so much.

I like that you chose to tell the story through Rik's eyes. His amusement and fear for Neville's sanity is really funny and I love how he tries to take the mick of him a little - like asking if he ever fell of a broom - and then gets surprised when Neville has a genuine answer.

Neville in this is also just fantastic. Drunk Neville. It would have been funny to have seen more of him! It's just something you wouldn't see in the books which gave you such a good oppertunity to make the most of it and you didn't waste a word. His complete innocence and the fact that Riks sarcasm is totally lost on him is kind of sweet to read. Yet through all this you still managed to keep Neville's character well enough so he's recogniseable.

I love how he recounts his story with complete disregard of the fact he's speaking to a muggle in his inebriated state. You got so many details that we could relate to as well as adding a few new ones for us to read. I'm not surprised Rik is a little alarmed!

Ok keeping the review as 12+ as possible but Luna is quite the little minx in this isn't she? Still, I couldn't help but laugh at the whole situation. You wrote it really well. She actually scared me a little when she came in and just stunned him too. You've made her a bit of a bad girl!

I think the one of the best parts of the story though was the memory part. Having the story start as before but with Neville and Luna completely missing and the unsteady feeling they both had was just perfectly done - I loved it!

Well done on such an awesome HC entry Dan - I really loved it!

Lauren :)

Author's Response: Hi, Lauren!

Poor Rick is completely out of his depth in this conversation. So is Neville, for that matter. They're two people who come from such different worlds that they're never going to connect on any level whatsoever. That's a big part of what made this so much fun to write. ;)

I'm glad you thought that Neville was recognizable. I worried a bit about that because I knew that I was stretching both him and Luna for comic effect. His blatant disregard for the Statue of Secrecy was partly because he'd had too much to drink and partly because he was sort of reveling in being a rebel at that moment. He had just escaped from Luna and made his way to America, after all.

Luna is... different, for sure. The thing is, while she definitely never behaved like this in the books, in a way I can kind of see it. Neville is pretty smitten with her, after all. For a girl who never really had friends until her fourth year, that must have been a novel experience. And as far as the other part, well, Luna has a certain emotional separation from the rest of the world. It's just biology to her. And when she stuns him, I tend to imagine that she was thinking of his departure like he was challenging her to an intercontinental game of hide-and-seek.

Poor Rick! He has no idea what's happened. Actually, maybe that's for the best.

I'm really glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for reading and reviewing!

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