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Review:DracoFerret11 says:
Hello there! This is DarkRose from Ravenclaw on the forums here to review for you for the House Cup 2013! :D So, let's go over things:

Plot: How charming! I really think this was exceptionally sweet! I love Luna and Rolf, but I practically never read stories about them. I think you definitely did them justice! I love that they met on a train. Something about that is just so...Harry Potter, haha. Great job!

Characterization: You did amazingly portraying these two! I LOVE that you made Luna fond of trains. That just seems to fit her personality to a tee. And her people-watching and eccentricity and being a journalist for the Quibbler? All fantastic choices. You really showed her perfected. And I loved Rolf too! I can imagine him being just as eccentric as Luna and liking the same things and I can definitely see them being a great pair. I wish we'd met Rolf in canon! (Oh, and I loved the final line of the story! So cute!)

Descriptions: I liked that you described how Luna and Rolf looked and acted. I could even have done with more descriptions of the train and how it looked, felt, smelled, sounded, etc., but as is, the story is still wonderful.

Emotions: I like that you mentioned that Luna used to have feelings for Neville, but you kept this canon and had him marry Hannah. Fantastic! And I think you really showed your grasp of Luna's personality when you made her the non-jealous type. I wish I could even see you write her relationship with Rolf since I'm sure it would be amazing.

Interactions: I really liked the conversations between Luna and Rolf, but I was a little surprised that he said, "I'm a wizard" in public. Statute of Secrecy, much? I can see him being careless, though. I wish we could see their relationship in another story (hint, hint? :) ). You wrote this wonderfully.

I think you did a great job and really embraced the challenge. My compliments and good luck with the House Cup!

--Emily

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