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Review:Roots in Water says:
Hello there!

Ah- so it's the first appearance of the infamous motorcycle! Haha- I like this version of how he comes across it.

I enjoyed reading this story. I think that you did a good job with Sirius' characterization as well as his run from Grimmauld Palace. You could definitely see why he ran here (not that the reasoning behind his decision to run was ever in question) and it makes sense that a huge fight was the event to spark his running. It's actually quite sad how quickly his mother acted against him in ensuring his separation from the family name.

I think that it was a really good choice to include Sirius' encounters with the Muggles during his journey, for, as you wrote, they cemented his idea that he had made the right choice. Imagine if he had met a rude Muggle though... Although I doubt he would have changed his mind, it would have put an unnecessary damper on his journey to James' house.

I do have a question, though: what was the diner doing open at 2:00 am, if my math serves me correctly? That's either awfully late or awfully early for a diner to be open...

The manner in which you have portrayed the relationship between Sirius and Regulus is different than what I have in my mind, though no less good for that fact. I'd always imagined that they were less friendly with each other, more resentful of the other's views and life decisions, though below it would remain an element of the affection they once carried for each other. However, their relationship certainly wasn't the focus of this story and you did well with the little appearance Regulus made in this story.

All in all, I think that you did well with this story. Everything flowed together smoothly and it was an enjoyable read. Good work! :D

Author's Response: Thanks for the read and review! I'm glad you liked this. I had a lot of fun writing it! The bike thing just kinda came to me as I was writing and I fell in love with the idea!

As far as the diner...I must admit to knowing NOTHING about London or any other country outside of the US (I know...very ignorant) but does the UK not have all-night diners? I know we do here, but if they don't over there then I messed up with that one. LOL!

With Regulus...I always imagined them to be on an amiable level at least until Reg joined the Death Eaters. Like their relationship was on some sort of slippery slope sliding slowly into a vague dislike.

Thanks so much again for reading and sharing your insight!


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