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Review:MC_HK says:
I really enjoyed this :) As I like to gush about description, I'll tell you, you have a talent for it. It wasn't the normal "there's a blue house, a red fence, and white shutters" it was more... in depth I guess you could say. I also like that it's about Alicia, a character we don't get to really know in the books.

I would say Alicia is not flat, but she's not big and bold either. It's still a pleasure to read though, because I think with where you took this, you can't really make her big and bold. The important thing is that you wrote her in such a way that the reader can get a sense of her personality.

Your writing style is anything from boring. You took a normal day at the Ministry and turned it in to a very lovely and kind of self-discovery journey for Alicia. It made me feel warm and fuzzy inside, like when you eat a fresh-out-the-oven chocolate chip cookie with milk :)

There are a few things I spotted such as a couple run on sentences and some punctuation errors, but other than that this is great! I look forward to reading more from you :) MC_HK

Author's Response: Hey!

Thanks so much for the lovely review! I'm always unsure of my writing so it's a really awesome surprise to hear that you thought I have talent at writing description. That really means a lot, so thank you :)

I'm glad that you think that about Alicia - that her personality was able to be conveyed, because that's probably one of the most important things about characterisation. And I'm also so glad that you didn't find it boring and enjoyed it!

The story is definitely not perfect, so I'll reread and edit and see if I can spot those run on sentences/punctuation errors when I get the chance. But, definitely a big thank you for the lovely review - I really appreciate it!

- Charlotte :)


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