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Review:Celtic_Dreamer7 says:
Greetings!

This was a very interesting read. I love how you incorporate a new school and how you included such details of everything. It really made everything stand out more. I like how you didn't end it with whether she got in or not.

There were a few minor things throughout but nothing that took me out of the story. I would suggest trying to use variations of the word "said" more. Perhaps adding a few details of what was going on. You repeated "my dad said" a few times that could have been something like "my dad remarked."

This was a great little one-shot and I do hope you continue it as a story. I would love to read if she gets in or not. I would also love to hear more about the school itself.

Great job and good luck to your house!

~Celtic~
Slytherin

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your ideas(:
I will definitely go back and change it to make it better.
I was a little rushed for time, so that's why it isn't amazing.
But thank you(: I am really glad you think I should continue with it(:

~Sarah


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