From the few stories I've read by you, it seems you love to start off your one-shots with a punch, and you definitely do that here as well. From the very first line, my interest was piqued, and I had to figure out just how Victoire ended up upside down by a giant.
I really love how you've characterised Victoire here. She's very relatable, and I love how in detail you go with her backstory, talking about the wanderlust she's had since she was a child.
Condescending Alex is a brilliant character as well. I've definitely met people like that in my life, and they're just a bear to deal with, but awfully funny to read about, in my opinion. As long as I don't have to deal with them in real life, haha. :)
I love the detail you go into in this one-shot. You definitely made use of the word count - I'm pretty sure this was almost 5000! You definitely didn't waste it either - I love some of the little details you added, like Bill's overprotectiveness both when she was a baby to now, the story of Victoire and Teddy's break-up, and the story of the giant. They all really added to the story, and I found myself enjoying every bit of it.
Your writing style is one of my favourites to read on HPFF - it's so intricate and detailed. "Since childhood, the girl was overwhelemed with wanderlust. Circled and dotted maps lined the contours of her mind, wide blue Weasley eyes eager to soak in every blade of grass of the landscape, each crag and secret of a strange land." This line is one of my favourites - it's so eloquent and well-written, and a much more appealing way to describe her love of travel.
Overall, this was a really amazing one-shot! Great job! :)
Author's Response: Hello! :)
Thank you so much, I'm glad the first line drew you in and you liked the story. I really enjoyed writing it and coming up with all the little traveling details and quirks.
It's wonderful to hear you liked Victoire and found her relatable! I loved coming up with her personality, especially her need and passion for traveling. A lot of reviewers have also related to knowing someone like Condescending Alexander, and I'm glad you could relate too! Well, not glad that you had to deal with people like that... but glad you thought it was realistic, haha!
You're right, I actually had to cut about 600 words to use it as a submission! I'm glad you didn't think it was too rambling, but complemented and completed the story. I'm glad you liked Bill, and the story of the breakup, which I thought I had better include since the story was about Vic.
Aw, that is such a lovely comment about my writing style, thank you! :) I'm so glad you enjoy it. And thank you for the fantastic review, it was just amazing to receive! :D