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Review:Roots in Water says:
Hello there!

Wow. Just wow. I thoroughly enjoyed this one-shot- you did a fantastic job with it. I haven't read too many stories with Victoire as the main character, but I really liked how you characterized her here. She was a very relatable character, far from the spoiled and vain girl she's sometimes portrayed as.

Her journeys, her way of describing her excitement and the sights around her... It makes me wish that I had a bit more wanderlust myself. But alas- I don't, although I don't mind traveling.

I definitely think that you managed to capture the spirit of traveling. Her meeting with Finn was very interesting and served as a great central event for this story. His story about his encounter with the English giant was very amusing and highly enjoyable.

Even her companion, Condescending Alexander, was a very real addition to this story. Of course you meet people like that when you travel. People who think that they know everything, that they've travelled everywhere there is to travel and can now share their wisdom with the masses. I'm just glad that Victoire was able to escape his clutches in the end.

I also really liked Bill's concern for his daughter's safety. It added another element of realism to the story, because it's an unfortunate fact that women traveling alone are not in the safest of positions. As well, I loved the small mention of the relationships between Bill and Fleur and Molly and Arthur. I'm a bit of a romantic (:P), so I was very happy to get that dash of marriages that worked out and couples that remained in love. However, I also think that you did a great job with Victoire's relationship with Teddy. You explained their breakup very well, including the hint that they weren't, perhaps, done forever.

I also really liked your conclusion. It was fantastic to see hints of what Victoire would go on to experience and the concluding sentence was a fantastic one. It summed up both the piece and Victoire's journey/personal growth beautifully.

I did notice a few typos as I was reading and I thought I'd point them out quickly. To begin, with the phrase "was overwhelemed" it should be "overwhelmed" and with the phrase "travel the Muggle" I think you missed the word "way" at its end. As well, with "tricky to disgintuigh" it should be "distinguish". But other than that, your story read very smoothly! :)

All in all, I really enjoyed this one-shot. You did a great job with this and the theme of travel. Great work! :D

Author's Response: Hello! :)

I'm so glad you liked the story, and enjoyed the way I portrayed Victoire. I really liked coming up with her personality and hopefully making her a round character. It's wonderful to hear you found her relatable and breaking those typical stereotypes. :)

Ah, I'm so pleased you enjoyed and connected with the theme of traveling and Vic's wanderlust! I loved relating the giant myth into the story, and the character of Finn, and I'm glad it enhanced the theme of traveling. I love traveling myself, so knowing that passion came across in the story is just lovely to hear! :)

Condescending Alexander was based on people I've met while traveling, so it's so funny to hear people say they've met similar personalities! I'm glad you were rooting for Victoire to get away, and that her annoyance was realistic.

Yes, I imagined Bill's worries would be very common if a little annoying for Victoire. I imagine it's hard for those left to stress and be concerned at home. And I'm glad you liked the mentions of the other Weasleys, I hope it was tied in enough to the canon of Next Gen! :) It's also great to hear your reaction to the Teddy relationship, I hoped it would seem realistic and sympathetic. And you're right, they're only young and still might cross paths again!

Ah, I will be sure to fix those typos! :) And I'm glad you liked the conclusion, and the hints of Victoire's future adventures. I'm considering expanding on this story just because it was so much fun to write! :D

Thank you for this wonderful review, I absolutely loved reading it! :D


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