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Review:nott theodore says:
Hello! I'm here reviewing for Gryffindor in the house cup :)

I haven't read many Regulus stories but I really enjoyed reading this one. He's such an interesting character and I liked your interpretation of him in this one-shot. I found myself feeling really sorry for him; his life was so short and ultimately so tragic. He never really had a chance, did he? It makes me realise how lucky Sirius was to escape the control of his parents, even though his life wasn't much better. The mention of Sirius here provided an effective contrast between the two brothers, and reminded me that Sirius never even knows how his brother died, or what he was trying to do. The tale of the two brothers (so to speak) is really devastating.

Some of the imagery you had in this one-shot was really lovely! "When did he slip from one to other, shedding his childhood like a snake sheds its old skins?" The allusions to snakes and the connection with Slytherin throughout were great, and I enjoyed your descriptions as well.

Another aspect I thought was very good was the detail you included, such as Kreacher being placed under a Disillusionment Charm to travel to the cave, and the difficulties he had paying for the train. Those sorts of things add depth to this story and really enhance it.

I thought the way you incorporated the travel theme was brilliant; the fact that Regulus had chosen to use Muggle travel on his way to do something to destroy Voldemort had a sort of defiance to it, I thought. Of course it would have been better for him to remain undetected, but the fact that he got to the cave with the aid of the people Voldemort seemed to hate the most was another act of resistance which highlighted Regulus' change of heart.

I noticed just one typo: "signed his life over to force too vast for him" -- to a force

Apart from that, you've got a really enjoyable and poignant one-shot here - well done!

Sian :)

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