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Review:Roots in Water says:
Hello there!

Oh man- the summary certainly sets this story up to be hilarious! Severus Snape- the muse. I can just imagine it!

Okay, after reading the story, the first thing I will say is that you did a fantastic job of keeping the essence of the characters while still putting them in an absolutely absurd situation. Voldemort was still his grumpy, "superior" self; Bellatrix was still clingy and vicious; Lucius was still looking for every possible way to climb the social ladder and Severus was still intolerent of slights to his dignity.

I liked how you still had Harry be Voldemort's enemy, this time as a rival fashion designer. "Harry's Hipsters", "Voldie's Vanity" - I like the alliteration.

I think that you did a good job of describing each scene. There were plenty of smaller moments to laugh at as well as larger ones, which is great, and the narration of those moments was very well done. It's funny how inept they all are. :P

I did notice a few typos, that you can fix should you choose to edit this. To begin, the phrase "learnt from attending London Fashion Week" would flow better it phrased like this: "learnt it while attending...". As well, with "remarkable well" it should be "remarkably" and with "accoriding to plan" it should be "according".

Snape's abandonment of "Voldie's Vanity" is interesting because, in a way, it mirrors the books. After all, Snape did become a spy for the Order and worked to save Harry's life. He did leave Voldemort.

Your conclusion was nicely done. Of course Voldemort's attitude would be "every man for himself" at this point. Too sick of their company, he just abandons them... I wonder how long it will be before Bellatrix tracks him down.

All in all, I think that you did a good job with this one-shot. It was definitely funny to read. Good work! :D

Author's Response: Hi there!

I'm so glad that you found that everyone was in character. I did realise it was a bit out there with the whole fashion designer thing, but hearing this assured my fears!

Of course the rivalry would continue on into the fashion world, it would be weird if it didn't!

I think I almost prefer writing the smaller scenes as opposed to the larger ones because you can be more subtle there and see what they pick up on, so I'm glad that you liked it so much!

Thank you for pointing out those typos, I was feeling very lazy due to the heat when posting this and resisted a final read through but I'll go and edit them in!

I hadn't actually thought of that when writing this, but now you mention it, it does fit and I'll pretend I did it intentionally :P

I'm so glad that you liked this story and thanks for this fabulous review!

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