Holy Harry Potter did I love this. I had no idea how this was going to go actually, I was quite surprised to see Neville - although I should have guessed it was him from the cardigan - and I found Rick very entertaining and I loved his inner comments and the moment when he realised that Neville was actually being serious about the whole brooms and witches thing was really funny. Your knowledge of locations was really impressive and I'm ashamed to say I only know about half of that list, I've never been very good at geography.
I really laughed at that bit where Neville got het up about the question he was asked. At first I was as confused as Rick but by the end of it, oh lord, talk about getting the wrong end of the stick. A lot was revealed there - I didn't realise Luna was so...active, Neville seems really worked up over that. I loved the 'I'm just a man, you 'ear me, I'm just a man' because I imagined him saying it uber dramatically and then throwing his head into his palms and Rick just looking totally confused.
Neville is so adorable in the books, its funny to see the changes you've made to him as he's grown up but there are still elements of the child he once was. I loved the way he recounted the story of the first lesson of flying incident. I was almost waiting for the 'why is it always me' when Luna walked in. She was kind of badass here and kind of scary, I almost feel sorry for Neville. I love the way she just knocks him out and then is like 'aww he's so cute when he's asleep!'.
Probably my favourite part was the way you then added the section at the end where it's as if it all never happened because his memories from the event are gone, it was really awesome and that last line made me smile. It really tied everything together and how nothing is ever really how it seems. Awesome story and I never saw one spelling or grammatical error! I'm blown away, yet again.
Author's Response: Hi, Maz! I will get some of these reviews responded to tonight!
Rick was loosely modeled off of my redneck uncles. OK, maybe it wasn't so loose. Anyway, it made him pretty easy to write. As far as the locations, well using Google plus being a regular Jeopardy watcher carried the day.
Ha! You know, I thought a lot about Luna and what she and Neville might get up to if they were left to their own devices. On one hand, everyone thinks of Luna as this naive, sweet, pure little flower of a girl. But on the other hand, she has this nearly complete emotional disconnect from the rest of the world. Also, she tends not to care about other people's morality and behavioral norms. So I imagine that once she gave it a try, if she liked it, then it's all just biology to her and she wouldn't see any problem with repeating the exercise as often as she liked.
I did twist Neville a bit and turn him... hmnnn, I don't know if "dark" is the right word, but I definitely took him past the sweet, innocent little boy.
The last section with post-obliviation Rick was sort of a late addition. I'm pleased with how it turned out, so I'm glad you liked it. :)
Thanks so much for the wonderful and encouraging review. I really, really wasn't sure about this story going in. I guess I did OK.