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Review:marauderfan says:
Hello, here with your requested review!

You mentioned your characterisation of Luna as an area of concern, but I think it's actually great. She isn't as quirky as the Luna from the books, but since she's so much older in this story, it makes sense that she would have changed a little. Despite her being a little less weird, she's still very Luna. When she thinks about how Rolf would have a nice singing voice - sixteen year old Luna would probably have said that out loud, but 27 year old Luna just thinks it.

That might be something to add if you decide to go back and edit this later. I think that as Luna grew up, she may have stopped saying odd and slightly uncomfortable observations, but she'd still think them. So it could add a lot to the story to have more of Luna's candid thoughts about things.

Also, I'd just like to add that I loved the excerpt from the dragon textbook. It had the same tone of quirkiness that seems to be a part of everything in the wizarding world (I especially loved the sentence about baby dragons being like humans in that they're adorable until they launch something nasty at your face!)

Lastly, this would be great as a short story. I love Luna and Rolf and I think there's a lot more story to tell about both of them and about the dragons! I'd love to continue reading. But it works as a one-shot as well! :)

Author's Response: Hey, thanks for stopping by!

I'm happy that you felt like Luna seemed like herself as an adult with the subtle quirks, and I agree that I could add more on that front if I chose to continue this into a short story or edit it. The wheels are already turning in my head in that regard, so we'll see what happens.

I loved writing that excerpt from the textbook, and I tried to capture the tone from the books. I could see including other excepts, again, if I choose to turn this into a short story.

Thanks for your very kind review :)

-Amanda


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