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Review:MC_HK says:
Hello there :)

First, the good! I loved this! It was really enjoyable and well written. What I love most is how seamlessly you worked in Ciara's background and history with the main story line. This really helped me get a good look in to who she is, what her personality is like, and what I may expect from her in the future. Her inner dialogue and narration is very funny and you write it in a way that it's like I can hear her talking to me. It's not stiff; it's just natural. The chapter was a really good length as well, I enjoyed that it was long but not so long that it was almost a chore to get through.

Now to the bad :( Well, not really the bad, but just a few things that stood out to me. There seems to be some words missing in some areas, but also added words that shouldn't be in some sentences. There are a few grammar problems here and there, and I spy a few run-on sentences that really mess up the flow of the story. I kind of don't understand why some of her thoughts are italicized but then others are? Maybe kind of clean that up a bit. There is also a spot that has the word "caption" where I think you meant to put "captain".

Other than that, I really like this story and hope you continue on with it :) Look forward to reading more, MC_HK :)

Author's Response: Aw Thanks for the review and liking it.
I wanted those sentence to be italicized which were as conclusion for her. I would clean it up a bit of course and would be updating soon.

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