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Review:CambAngst says:
Hi, Beeezie!

This was really well-developed and it's obvious that you put a lot of thought into it. Not at all the type of story one expects to see in a challenge like this where time is of the essence.

Your Teddy immediately reminded me of the way you write him in your other stories. He's brave, but not reckless. He's smart, organized and put together. He's obviously hopelessly smitten with Victoire, to the point where she can take him right out of his routine. He seemed to work rather well with your original character. Each of them was able to lead or follow, as the particularly of the situation dictated.

The situation in the hidden Catalan treasure room was cleverly put together. It didn't feel overly obvious what the solution to the problem was, nor was it easy or without risk for Teddy and Johanna to retrieve the treasure. It was very realistic for the type of danger that witches and wizards seem to confront in the Harry Potter universe once they're adults.

Overall, your story was very well-developed. It didn't feel rushed the way that a lot of challenge entries do. The characters and the plot were fleshed out very well, giving it a lot of depth. You seemed to take your time to fill in the little details that make a story vivid and rich.

I couldn't find a single thing wrong with your writing. Very nice job!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for this review! I'm really glad you liked it, and grateful you took the time to review this much longer piece. :)

I'm glad Teddy reminded you of the Teddys in my other stories, because they should ideally all fit together - I don't like recreating the characters each time, so I mostly keep my fics in the same head canon universe. I'm always happy to hear that it works!

Thank you so, so much. I'm glad you liked this story so much and thought that it worked well and that the pace was solid, and I'm so sorry it's taken me way too long to respond.

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